Voted For: One-Man-Band
ok.first off WOW,excellent topic that was done sooo well by both of you,i hesitated from voting for 2 days cause this was so hard to choose from...
aight omb,awesome imagery,one of the best topicals ive EVER read in my life,hit me hard n reminded me a bit of a movie i watched but better...lol...intro was strong in rhyme scheme n set the piece off in the right directing alot of qoutable lines...to many to mention really,you obviously put alot into this n it showed..was'nt boring at all some vocab was really nice also,i can't really say there was anything that i wouldve changed about it....outro,was very strong n held alot of emotion,got chills from the ending"never been moved by a piece quite like this b4"...reminded me of nas a lil with the deduction n play with numbers that really spead up the flow n help the delivery......nice piece.....9.5/10
aight mad dog,damn this piece was so real,it connected personally with me,you had lots of imagery that was easy to catch n caught my eye,2 bars stood out for me being the strongest n most predominent in your verse n that i particularly enjoyed myself....
1:Walked in the room and u laid there no oxygen mask on u looked like u sleepin,
I held ur hand and cried I jus wanted u to wake up and say it’s ok ur only dreamin,
^^i read this n i wowed,then reread it again..lol very nice...
2:
The funeral began I was in the third row watchin not takin my eyes off the coffin,
So confused was I here or this sum dream cryin one sec then stoppin,
^^so real it was uncanny...nice work...
you had many great parts but these stood out for me more so then any other,lots of emotion throughout the entire piece,
the fact you put a date in there referred back to yourself in this ryhme as being a dedication was nice also,very nice drop....9/10
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i dislike voting on this cause i feel you both deserve a win from these drops they both pretty much made me sit back in my seat a couple times....i gave it to omb cause i thought he came with a better set out story line(slightly).....
you should both be very proud of these topicals n i will be nominating them both for pieces of the month.....
excellent work...much respect n props ta both...
hope my vote in sufficent enough.......
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