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Old 09-18-04, 05:33 PM   #39
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Originally Posted by ~philosopher~
ok I just fixed it the best I could, original verse in the sig link, this one I fixed, L.I., can you fix it more??? show me what I coulda done better

I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/


I feel bad merkin you after L.I. just fucked yo ass up/
Way you get beat, it's like you 'wear to much makeup'/
Nah..links are worn out now a days...dont use em...dont use 'these' things around ur punches...the meta is weak...

Didnt see this merkin comin, like I murdered you in stealth/
I dont like insultin you but 'For$aken' you do it to yourself/
Meh...its just not a punch..ur just stating...

You can ask you crew for 'salvation', but there laughing to/
And I'd say pray to 'god', but he has already 'Forsaken' you/
Decent...made me smile...this was the best bar so far...sorta witty...good bar...

Tryin to battle an mc like myself, why'd you even bother/
Battle is lookin like starwars 'For$aken I am your father'/
Noooooo...never again...horrible...if u think about it...it doesnt even classify as a punch...

My rhymes like hot sauce, leave you scared and 'shakin'/
Yo physcick, saw ahead a time an named yoself For$aken/
Nah...just not working...already tried so many personals with his name...

You really forcused on his name alot...which isnt good...go at him from all aspects...onlky had one good bar in there...but thats sumtin to work off....keep elevating
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