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IP:
i say about....7.5/10
i aint really worried about structre cuz
when you rap you don't HEAR structure
I liked the whole concept of the song
had like a kanye's "all falls down" theme to it
your flow was iight
but to make it flow better and to entertain the reader
make shorter lines.. like limit the time of when the next
rhyme is gonna come ike this:
yours:
Maybe she needs to get a new one that’s better so she can get paid-more/
How about she needs go to school again to get money for her own protection…
About 10 years later she looked in the mirror and saw her own reflection/
mine:Maybe she needs to get a new one that’s better
inreased credit, so she can get paid-more
send bill letters in shredders,everyone she knows
is aware that she's poor
^see it keeps interest
nice drop 4 real i aint butterin ya up 
i see MK famous for these open micaz 
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