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Old 07-12-02, 04:21 PM   #4
Kastaway
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Yea this was a nice piece too.. I like this better than the last one.. obviously it could improve, but im sure you know that... try using some more meta's and similies..

I was feelin this bar
"trust is a two way thing but sometimes I feel it's not there'
sometimes ur kinda like cancer leavin me wit no hair' "

keep Rhymin and Elevatin... 1...
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