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Old 09-21-04, 05:57 PM   #26
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Voted For: Fiya Spitter

Nigguh You Couldnt Be 'Hot~Moving' To Hell Wearing Sweaters~In~Summer/
C...I...8...U...N...1...L9...just only using Letters And Numbers/ (See I ate u in one line)
hott opener, with decent wordplay and a good punch
This nigguh named himself 'fiya spitter' hopin he could spit some 'hot~shit'/
But yo punches couldnt be 'hard hitters' and end my 'game' if ya name was 'LiL Flip'/*
nott hat bad, pretty poor punch tho
Nigguh write your shit, perfect it, if you need to, rehearse it/
Yeah youre not wack.. Only thing that's not ill is your verses/
decent punch on the second line, but first kinda reminded me of a 8 mile freestyle
Now this nigguh is a dork, forget the guns that he 'claims' to hold/
Cuz the only thing he touchin are nine's..ten's..and eleven year olds/
thats a good punch with a decent personal, but it only works if its actually true
damn you could 'stitch' up your 'asshole' and your 'shit' still 'wouldnt~be~tight'/
and you 'couldn't see' your way to a win if Sean Paul 'gave~you~the~light'/
not bad, usin sean paul wordplay tho....
Dogg u aint gettin no respect from me like a 'substitute~teacher'/
so im a switch these punchlines wit infared nines..see 'if that a reach ya'/
closer was ok, but the attle had some better punches, so not very good as a closer

over all i'd give that verse a 6/10, wordplay and punches are good, but it could do with a bit of better structure, but yeh decent

You like to talk the shit, "Bye, bye, bye", you're all ass
You come as hard as a nigka, that's jackin' off to Lance Bass
decent opener, and well formed punch, pretty good
I mean, you keep on talkin' tall, but you always act a bitch
You never do what you say, you're all fart and no shit
could be a good personal, but again is it actually true??
You callin' me retarted, what the fuck you tryin' to do?
Like burgers to Opera, the losses keep on flyin' to you
lol, that was good punch, nice wordplay
I'll chop you up like Hannibal, you sucky lines are bent
And man, I ain't kiddin', cuz I ain't a parents
ok guess, not the best bar i'v seen from you
Kid, you made a mistake, and that was goin' up against me
Cuz yo verse is as blank.... as a white tee
that was decent, good wordplay and nice personal
We all kno you suck. That's a pun, you fuckin' hoe
What does you crew think about you... like at the quote below
good closer, and with a decent personal and 2 nice punches

overall i'd say that your verse was better than tee's, bcos you used personals well and the punches hit harder
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