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Old 09-23-04, 05:54 AM   #14
Terumoto
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matt: ya shit was ok.. was pretty standard though, get more creative. and fix ya structure.. put it into lines, paragraph is way hard to read.

crit: word! multis! but anyway, nice flow, decent punches... coulda got more personal, but whattya gonna do..
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