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Old 07-13-02, 06:45 PM   #17
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BREAKDOWN::

IP:

LIL DALLAS::


The fire I emit on this keyboard is gonna burn your hands//
Repitwa's fault, I know this battle was not in your plans//
NOT A GOOD OPENING, BASIC AND TOO SIMPLE



And S.T.A.R. like a bitch I'll slap you into the corner, when you wake, you gonna find yo moms done disowned ya'//
cuz now you got a brotha', Lil D' in the creep, while you sleep done boned her//
PRETTY MUCH STRETCHED,AND FILLER



I split you, hit you so hard this shit is a sin//
I change ya fate, across ya chin comes the strength of ten men//
NOT FEELING IT..


smack both of y'a'll so hard it'll disfigure your face//
dissappearin without a trace, both of y'a'll, in an unmarked coffin//
MAN NO RHYME SCHEME HERE..OR HARD PUNCH..NOT GOOD

See what you thinkin, but it'll be too late when they hear you coughin, on Guillotine's cum//
What type of name is Guillotine, you musta couldn't wait to sound cheap//
BLAH



Lick wit ya tongue, swallow wit ya throat and take heads wit ya teeth??//
Fuckin faggot, suck dick, suck dick right//
lick and swallow but no bites//
nigga' comin at me wit Nintendo lines, betta get to school, get some knowledge, enhance yo mind//
I could hit you wit way more lines, but I'm bouncin cuz on the real battlin some bitches ain't worth my time//

NOT A GOOD ENDING MAN..WASNT FEELING YOUR VERSE,UMM YOU NEED TO WORK ON YOUR RHYME SCHEME AND PUNCHES..SET THEM UP BETTER..THINK BEFORE YOU WRITE.



STAR::


Freedom or death? , I give niggas a reason to sweat//
It's no test, lyrically its like I'm seen as the best//
OK BEGINNING, NOT TOO HARD HITTING


Read between the lines, ya'll cant rhyme like Wyclef//
I spit shit quick,rip off fat lips that got hot-breath//
BLAH USELESS SHIT HERE


Bad luck,keep it up flamin bars givin yall a hot-flash//
Only time I do wack anything is when smackin ya moms ass//
OK


Dealin' a lyrical killin to lil'dallas like the NBA's Mavericks//
Got rap AIDS,change ya name from lil' dallas to lil'have-in-it//
NO NOT FEELING IT


Then bring pain to haters like a dying dyke in labor//
Born a natural disaster they should call me ill nature//
NOOOO

It's no fun if ya'll try'na run from my lyrics with no legs//
Ya weak rhymes f/ will smith couldnt make me "nod my head"//
NOT A GOOD ENDING MAN..NEED TO COME STRONG HERE, YOUR VERSE WAS OK,NEED TO WORK ON YOUR SETUPS AND PUNCHES,,GET SOME WORDPLAY IN THERE..MAKE YOUR VERSE WITTY AND CREATIVE



GUILLOTINE::


Dallas a lil state in my world, an a star just a big ball of gas/
Y’all be all in my ass cause y’all be failing to get past /
OK OPENING NOT TOO HARD,BASIC SHIT


Either you diss me back an you’ll be givin head to a glock/
I cock and shoot quick, grab da loot, shoot up tha block/
WEAK



Your insults come out like calling me a son of a mother/
They discover if they had sense they’d be runnin for cover/
OK



Son, you better run, can’t shoot cause you can’t cock a gun/
Another win for me, baggin two for tha price of one /
THIS WAS COOL..WORDED A LITTLE BETTER WOULD OF BEEN KILLER..



Its fun, to see you try beat me, you both beneath me/
Try to beef with me, you realise ya can’t defeat me/
BOOOO



just meet me on the streets, I’ll kill all your peeps/
the internet, it aint a video game, there aint no cheats/
BLAH


cause even if ya biting, Im fighting you off with my shit/
If it was like it was bent of a skit of some classic rap hit/
When I spit my verse it comes first cause its sick…
NOT A GOOD ENDING EITHER..PRETTY BASIC..UMM YOUR VERSE WAS ALSO OK,BUT I FELT YOU NEED TO WORK ON YOUR PUNCHES, YOUR PUNCHES COME OK BUT THERE WAY TO BASIC AND WEAK..MAKE THEM WITTY CREATIVE HARD HITTING..


EVERYONES VERSES WERE OK..LIL DALLAS CAME WEAKER THAN EVERYONE ELSE I FELT..HE CAME WITH LOTS OF FILLER ,WEAK PUNCHES NO RHYME SCHEME,GUILLOTINE CAME BETTER THAN LIL DALLAS HE CAME WITH SOME OK PUNCHES NOTHING REALLY HITTIN HARD BUT WERE COOL.STAR CAME EQUALLY GOOD AS GUILLOTINE WITH SOME OK PUNCHES WEAK WORDPLAY AND SHIT..NEED TO WORK ON SOME OF THAT SHIT..BUT I HAVE TO GIVE THIS BATTLE TOO GUILLOTINE

VOTE GUILLOTINE I FELT HIS VERSE A LITTLE MORE..