Voted For: HoPe

Good topicals from both......Jono...good topical, your story was good, imagery was good, flow coulda been better an structure was weak, vocab was lacking, an even though I liked your story it was too common...a homie story is so unoriginal, I wanna read something off the wall, unique different, makes it a much more entertaining read, your piece had emotion though an thats a plus but it was lacking a lot.

Hope.... Story development was very strong in this, it developed to a nice climax an you made the topic your own, you gave me a view of topic from your prespective an I liked that, vocab was kinda weak, but flow was nice an structure was nice, imagery was good coulda been better, but the story u told more than made up for the flaws of your verse.

Much respect to both, But I voted for hope based on having a stronger an more unique storyline to her verse, good drops by both an keep elevating.

Vote: Hope

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