aight, that free style was good, i like it. first off everyone on this site when they first started out had hatters... people called them noobs and herbs.. they got hated on and discouraged. but the ones that are left and have big winning records can hold their heads high and say "ya know what, even tho they hated on me at first, i made it..." and that is what counts. i like your free style, it shows elevation. the structure is there, your pretty much right on with that. it sounds more like a poem tho, the way it flows.... that kinda stuff can be fixed. it wont all happen at once, elevation can take a week or a year... if your serious about wanting to battle, dont quit... keep elevating and then go back to all the haters and battle them and shut them up. dont quit just because you lost a few battles... show them you can do it.

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