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Old 09-29-04, 06:40 PM   #3
~Miss Avy~
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This was feedback posted for Archeologist

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Archeologist

Why's there a battle in Front Lines..You said it yourself..
Tryed to switch your birth certificate..
...........Just to make a name for yourself..

^Nice wordplay. Didnt really see it as a hard hitting punch but more of a hard hitting diss.

your on the downhill slope..try's but has nothing but hope..
..this kid's similae to crack Because.. he used to be dope..
Im batlin a herb, i shud be goin for vets.. its sad to see..
.. You Want an easy win?... then just imagine your me..

^These right here are lol nice punches. I liked the first 2 but the second 2 wasnt bad at all lol.

Your styles antique.. your punches are covered with dust..
Couldnt blow the crowd away..
......... With a turbine fan and a following gust..

^This right here was alright but not really hard hitting. Good diss tho

Raphael your rare.. maybe even one of a kind..
You Got Owned....ur loss is inevitable.,
...As your names and prediction are already underlined..

^Solid closure right here. last 2 lines were jus ill!


Raphael

Getting pushy.....pm'ing me to hurry up bout sumthing I wasn't informed about*...
Even if you 'punched' me in the 'gut' your 'rhymes' wouldn't make me 'shout'...

^Okay punch. Could have been alot stronger tho.

Like damn I got mag 'clips' that'll injure your 'spits' and fragment your 'hips' with 'punches' that'll soften your 'lips'...

^umm really didnt see a punch. Multis and all that shit but no punch.

Shit looking at your little avatar would be the only way you'd get flashed...
Fuck your 'basic' "punches" couldn't even leave a 'banana bashed'!

^The first line was alright the 2nd line could have been better with a better punch.


Like...do you choose random peeps off the site and set up a battle hoping they'll accept and get an easy loss?
Like man, I can wipe away 'herbs' like you if I get out my dental floss!!

^First line was aiight the 2nd loss me...

I'll 'blow you away' as if I dropped a 'lyrical nuke'...
Like an alcoholic starting to puke...you getting 1 vote would be a fluke!

^This was a nice punch right here. First punch in your battle that was tight.


Called Archeologist, which means you 'dig up rare bones'...
I'll KO U so hard your head'll be left ringing....like ignored telephones!!...

This is also a solid closure. The rest of the verse should have been like these last few lines.... oh well
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