this wasnt to bad at all. you had some nice rhyme's in it.. but try to structure your shit better. seen az it's a text peice it has to be easy to read.so at the end of each line press the "enter" key.so everytime you start a new line you are below the previuos 1.
Also using 50 cent's rhyme's wont get you any respect.
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I contemplate dat death gotta be e-z
cus lyfe is hard, it leaves you physically, mentally, and
emontionally scarred..
I dont only see god judging me, because i see clear...
..from many men...

but yeah structure it better and keep elevating and you will have a nice peice....keep this shit coming.........pz