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Old 07-15-02, 06:29 PM   #20
rar one
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Break down..
Punchs-nef
Metas-nef
Multis-nef
Vocab-nef
rhyme scheme-1ne flow

1ne flow, yoru verse was basic.. with alot of playd punchs.. RHyme scheme was good on it, alot, and i mean ALOT better than Nefs, but your metaphors lackd some(to many playd ones) and your punchs werent that harder hitting..

Nef you came iight.. metaphors were working for you, but your bars are really to long.. Shorten then up to flow better, thatll help im tellin you..
Punchs werent bad.. your verse has possiblities..

hit me up on aim - "Tha rar one"

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