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Old 10-02-04, 03:13 PM   #12
Logic The Goonie
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dice- nah man. yo punches and shit was weak as fuck if they can even be consodered punchs and wordplay was unesscessary, simple, and whack also. keep trying harder becuz i can tell there is something in there....3/10

spek-i see you went more complex but it was still sort of simple. punchs were iight but coulda been much better. ill reword one of yo punches:
your pathetic puttin scrotem on ya modem virgin since you were born
closest you ever came to pussy, was using a touch screen for porn

iono how much better that is but slight reword for some of the stuff you do can make a serious impact on how hard it hits. just stop and think about what you are saying and if anything can be added in terms of wordplay and such. that should help you out. try to make sure that things arent easy to think of, if it takes you less than a minute to fully contemplate then its prolly not very good. thats all for now, keep it up.....7/10

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