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Old 10-04-04, 11:51 AM   #33
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Voted For: Lyriclesolja

yo this battle was wack...

lost & found : ur verse didnt flow at all...u pieced some line that could flow...and ur structure was slacking too....but i'ld say ya had punches and some decent multiz..no personalds and no wordplay...u were majorly talkin of how u gon to kill him..thats what i saw...gd verse but need a lil more work (structure,flow,wordplay and personals)

solja : ya verse didnt really flow too...ur opner was slacking ...but ur verse had atleast some wordplay..u too didnt have personals...but ur punches hit harder...and just like ur opponent ur verse didnt flow...ya gatta count ur syllabs a lil more...the only thing i liked about ur verse was the closer...that was good...but as for the rest u need to work on it a lil more...

no hate to both tho...


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