Voted For: king tissle

ill have you beat down and faded wit clorox bleach.
have you whiter than micheal jackson in kkk sheets
Alright opener, somewhat funny punch
i have a rhyme that just might turn the tide.
the mans toxic cause hes been beat with a bottle of paroxide.
This punch was weak, but it flowed well
you think you strong think you ass is made of acid.
but i will have you ripped up like cows in lake placid.
The first line of this bar made no sense. I saw where you were going, but it didn't work
have you sweatin like you stepped on a land mine.
but with your acid burnin youll be gone in no time.
You keep referring to acid, although there are thousands of other toxic chemicals. And why would he sweat if he stepped on a land mine...wouldn't he blow up?
im like king george the third over everbody and rasin hell.
for you its dead or alive but the blood on your body will tell.
The first line was an alright set up, but the last line didn't hit at all...


dis kid think he da king da only time dis nigga rocks da crown when he at burger king//
i'll make u look like spongbob my punches will put holes in yo face use tampons to stop da bleedin//
[B]Didn't even rhyme
in dis battle ur recievin da death certificate come against da toxic like usher u will get BURN//
dis nigga drinks cum'z like an milk when u have dat white mustache i tell u dont worry its just an sperm//
You went with two completely different concepts here. Usually it works better if both lines play off the same thing.
my punches knock u out of existance,,,have yo sweat stickin with yo fears//
break yo knees- break yo back have yo ass in an gay butt fuckin position dis nigga likes it u should call yo self da lord of da rings//
*scratches head* what?

Ok kids, both of you need some serious elevatin', but I'm not tryin' to hate. I understand y'all are new, so you just need some practice, that's all. Toxic you're lines are stretched more than old lady's with botox, so work on that. My vote here is goin' to king tissle, because his punches connected, his structure was better and he actually rhymed most of his stuff.

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