Originally Posted by phenom

Voted For: XxToXiCXxVeRbZ

Emcee:KingKenoDNC

Verse:
toxic verbs think he toxic well ya brain im go rock it//
if toxic say he can beat keno then we'll call him a false prophet//
this aint the pen but you bout to get lyrically raped//
i aint listenin to ya bullshit like nerds on blinds dates//
let it be known i spit flames so dont test, or get burned//
the king is here now so there is alot of lessons for u to learn//

Comments:hm...yeh you were pretty consistant ill give you that but you just didnt come hard....you should write ya verse then read it again to see if it makes sense then rewrite it with better multis and metas...although i did like the blind date one lol/

Marks:
Wordplay - 5/10
Metas - 6/10
Vocabulary - 5/10
Structure - 7/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 4/10
Closer – 5/10
Personals – 3/10 you said "if" not good word choice..
Enjoyment – 5/10
Creativity - 5/10
Overall - 50/100
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Emcee:XxToXiCXxVeRbZ

Verse:
my rhymes are sweet (nice) i punch u so hard make holes in yo teeth like cavaties//
yo rhymes wouldnt shine if u waxed dem clean even if u ride an skateboard yo rhymes wouldnt be extreme dan me//

Yo rhymes wouldnt be tighter dan mines if u wore bill cospy sweata//
my rhymes cutt yo verse like an papa shredda,,,,ur not gettin betta,u like an broken elevata//

Yo rhymes wouldne be fresh if u took some "winter fresh" iam makin u hot and sweart givin u hot breath//(RHYMES STINK)
call me an surgery doctor,,,take da "scapel" and incinsion through yo organs killing befo yo heart stops,cerbal death//

Comments:aight aight not bad verse..um ya structure was kinda fucked up but that doesnt matter too much to me its what its comprised of...i liked some of the metas and i think thats what won this..

Marks:
Wordplay - 6/10
Metas - 7/10
Vocabulary - 7/10 hott cerbal death
Structure - 5/10 coz i dont care about structure
Punches - 6/10
Opener - 6/10
Closer – 8/10
Personals – 5/10
Enjoyment – 7/10
Creativity - 7/10
Overall - 64/100
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