Voted For: final
Emcee: Final
Verse:
this kid claims in his rhymes he spits nothin but venom, shit...../
but the only poisonous liquid he spittin is inside of his dick/(AIDS)
this is not what i expected,this kids rhymes are horrendous/
his flow is so offcourse.........it matches with his record/
those corny raps u bringin aint accepted,that shits despised/
ya record keeps plummiting..........to a steady fast decline/
Comments:well....you need top elevate and make sure all the words go with eachother to make sense....um...work on punches and wordplay, vocab and metas...
Marks:
Wordplay - 4/10
Metas - 5/10
Vocabulary - 4/10
Structure - 6/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 8/10 liked that one
Closer – 5/10
Personals – 4/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 4/10
Overall - 49/100
----------49%
Emcee
oison
Verse:
i got gats thats made for stickin/
i get more chicks laid than chickens/
cleaning mc's like mades in kitchens/
got rhymes that u cant handle
in a battle, i'll wear u out like a sandle/
my raps glow like a candle
yo i stand out like hair with jell
make u fall out this rap game, oops u just fell
cuz ur rhymes aint well
it wont ring a bell
so shut yo mouth up fore i turn ur life to hell
u'll drop screamin like a roller coster
bust my gat and stick u like a fuckin poster
do i got cash? i get more bread than a toaster
in rap im numba one
my rhymes over cuz i got "FINAL"y done
Comments:work on ya fuckin structure...jeez...and elevate as much as you can...on every aspect of ya skillz...
Marks:
Wordplay - 4/10
Metas - 4/10
Vocabulary - 3/10
Structure - 0/10
Punches - 3/10
Opener - 4/10
Closer – 3/10
Personals – 4/10
Enjoyment – 1/10 but i had to read it..
Creativity - 2/10
Overall - 27/100
----------27%