I think internally you had everything for an iLL flow, but I werent feeling the concept, cos its not something I would really think about happening... The rhyme scheme was nice, good internals and multies worked all the way through... The vocab coulda been upped slightly for some knowledge words and strength... Wordplay was lacced, saw some similes, more metaphores woulda made it unto a stronger piece... It was a good read though, keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...