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Old 10-08-04, 05:26 PM   #31
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Voted For: Ice Pick

- Both had really stretched lines- just one used a tiny font-... Ice Pick had better punches...
Ur punches will never burn a livin flesh..they just ICED b4 u thro ‘em in ya spit
So,im astonished how u PICK me thinking 2 rip,when I just knocked u out like in ya sig
best bar from yvonne... wasn't great- the setup was weak... personal wasn't very clever, even the bold ICE and PICK were basic additions to the verse...
Ice Pick-
I liked a few of your lines... you show more potential in your verse... just work on line length-- and when you rhymed So with Ho... needs to stop-- need more of a complex rhymin structure to go with your vocab and description... keep workin on ur punches cuz they aint 100% yet, but in the right direction...
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