well, i personally enjoyed this peice through out the whole thing... it was awesome and had tru emotions.. the flow was amazin... and i understand where ur comin from... ur not alone even if its hard to think that u arent... i feel the same way... but ne way, back to the piece... truly beautiful, and the imagry was awesome too... fave lines:

I took that sharp pile of metal
and burned it with my pain
and 'though I cried a lake of tears
nothing could stop the flame.
It pooled and condensed, became something else.
The dark nights of isolation,
the hell of every day
all made a pool of metal, formless and gray.
What happened to me?
Do I hate myself so much?
I see from today what would happen, and I
want to change it all.

i dunno what i love about those lines...maybe its that i can relate to them... but ne way, keep it flowin, awesome work