Voted For: disciple05

emcee: G_Speed

Verse:
you a faggot ass bitch cuz you a little bro of a cheater...
lets see you win bitch you'll never be good u gay leader...
ppl forgot about you so when i ask they say support who...
you suck which is why you fuckin mom wanted to abort you...
you wont win one single battle so bitch getta fuckin clue...
yeah i win and suck at the same time bitch wutch you gon do...
you think you bad cuz of ur gay ass faggot name disciple...
haha you still suck bitch faggot dont be late for your ballet risidle...
i'm done wit dis losing dirt in face clown...
guess wut bitch i jus took you down...

comments....kid elevate you need to think of ENGLISH THINGS...such as metaphors....

45/100
45%

emcee:Lyrical Disciple

verse:
this dude wanna be Al Capone yet he so "religious"
i come unsespected at yo door like "jahova witness"

how you gone be Al Capone when you dont drink??
dawg quit rhymin cuzz your worst then nsync

my flows "untouchable" you cant see this
this clown is a fake pryin to JESUS

you pop ya mouth off while im poppin bottles
my lyrics drop ya jaws like you saw hott moddels

im tha lyrical discipe tha lyrical pshyco
ill "burn" up ya head with my "burner" like "michael"

you claim to be part of tha mob with tha name "Al Capone"
ill treat you like a "slob" and leave you "bloody" when i pull my chrome then like "monica" youll be "so gone"

i got lyrics that will "check" you like "nike"
i got a better flow then you that why you diss-like me

ill leave you red("read") all over like a newspaper
"shock" you with me rhymes like a "tazer"

its funny now you Al Capone but before you was ruff tuff thug
cuzz now you suck more and my guns will leave you "spread" out like a fold out "rug"

this dude cant see me nigga im from tha "wild wild west"
he wanna be Al Capone so imma put him away like ELIOT NESS..............WHAAAAA

Comments: well you need to elevate on yo structure mayne...other then that your fine...for now...but when you start battlin other people then you have to work on your metas and vocab.

marks...
51/100
51%

....sorry not as long as usual...just really tired...