Nice piece, at first I wasn't really feel'n the rhyming scheme and the parameter, but after the third bar it was flow'n nice. Deep peice as well, seems like you had alot to write on, yet still seemed to come off the top. I take this away from it cause it didn't seem to choppy, you broke from one bar into the next and the transition was very suttle. Overall this was well written, when it's finished it should be a nice one.

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