This is allright. But you need to drop longer more in depth peice's. For what this is it isnt too bad. But you could do much better.
Try a more original topic.Instead of doing a drive by.
If you do these sort's of topic's try using more emotion and imagry.
For 5 minute drop this is good. But try dropping peice's that you took more time to work on.That way your full talent will start to shine.
overall 6/10......
keep dropping....
pz