Voted For: d.j em sce

This was a really close topical battle and for one reason... both verses were well written.....

d.j em sce your verse had so much depth and raw emotion.. your words alone captured your thoughts of love and it flowed smoothly... i think the structure could have been better but your vocabulary was great... imagery was also used just a little too much but overall you worked this topic to your ability...

critic as soon as i started to read your first stanza i thought to myself he won this battle... everything flowed perfectly in that stanza and there was decent depth and good imagery.. BUT.. your verse lost its touch as it went on... it was kinda like you put less effort into it and just wrote anything basically.. i like how you put your verse into a story but i dont like how you did it like everyone else would have the plot is u played concept unlike dj's... your imagery got better but everything else dragged on and i kinda got bored with your verse... it didnt grab my attention much it was still a good verse but dj's emotion and depth got my vote

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