muahaha!!!!....i just wish you didnt put 'vampires' in your title...(!!!!)..would have made it even more surprising...and given and even sharper edge to it...but its all good...


...but yeah...i'm really liking this piece....on 2 levels...the simple one of the vampire....searching for the right prey...walking through the streets...purposefuly scaring the shite out of all passers by....looking for the thrill..drunk on the power of fear....

the second level of how it can be percieved as deeper than that...of how you see this sad 'little' girl...all alone....crying with undoubted and deep pain on a park bench...but when you come closer and she sees you...she smiles...as if she is pleased to see 'a face of death'....and then it becomes apparent...that she is looking for death...whatever happened to her seems to have tore her apart...and the option of death seems to her, a way of ridding herself of her pain and problems...and like you are an angel sent from heaven, come to release her from the pain....she says "thankyou"...and the vampire of course...olbiges...


really liked this piece..superb imagery..superb structure...the way it flowed from one word to the next..with excellent vocab...was at times breathtaking....it was a simple piece...made that bit better with (yes you guessed it) superb word-play and overall structure...and the ending, as i said above, was very well executed....

supremely talented - i hope one day you'll make something of it...cos it would be such a waste, one way or the other, if you didnt....


...respect...