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LoL Damn, IRP im sorry but the only thing you had in your verse that was good was.. well nothing really.. It was to "basic"...

::work on::
Your rhyme scheme- make sure it flows
Your mutlis, try an get like 3 diffrent rhymes in 2 bars..
Metaphors- you REALLY need to work on these, itll help your verse not only look alot better, but itll help tone your skills an make you come out harder..
Punchs - weres the hard personals?? weres the line making me laugh at how stupid yoru opponent is???

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your verse lackd alot on your flow as well.. same with metaphors an punchs, you had weak punchs, a lil harder to get you the win(dictionary line was iight but a lil playd) Ya but still weak.. Try working on all of your aspects and make it flow better, then go from there..

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