Voted For: x-on

Bradley your structure was just way off. You gotta space your lines so they do't run together, and they're easier to follow. Also you gotta work on your punches. You had some multis but they didn't really matter if the punches weren't gonna land. And don't use "//"anymore, it's newbish...
X-on your punches were aight you had some good vocab, but your lines were a little stretched. And for the record, it was Atmosphere, not Slug, but you knew it was one of 'em. But for future referrence, try to get your lines across in a manner that doesn't require many explanations...
V//X-On

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