decent stuff here, i've seen better from you but not bad
everything was intact for the most part..you had some
vocab working and the flow was on point except for a
stretched line or two, but i think you could benefit from
digging a little deeper content wise..not to take anything
away from yer work or anything like that. i just would have liked
to have seen you tap into that real creativity to really grab
the reader's attention..regardless props man n keep at it

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