iight heres the deal. you have some pretty good ideas for punches but you gotta learn how to word them a bit better man. like that sprite punch was quite good but the wording was a bit off. secondly you gotta work on your rhyme scheme it cant be three lines that rhyme. gottta be 2, 4,,6,8 get the idea? iight structure and flow need the most work tho, try to first even out each line on the screen and once you get good at that you can practice on evening out the SYLLABLES cuz thats what really makes something flow.
