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Old 10-21-04, 07:21 PM   #12
Terse.
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Voted For: Mr.Freeze

aight,
Okay battle....neither of yall had good structure tho...n i didnt see any punches that really stood out to me...Youngsta, u did aight...but u should git rid of the quotation marks, cuz u dont really need to make your wordplay that obvious unless it's really hidden...n the closer - u rhymed mic wit mic...u shot yourself in the foot wit that bar...Freeze, ya verse was straight too...but a couple lines were mad stretched, try n find ways ta' condense that shit...anyways,

V/ Mr. Freeze, for a better overall verse....no hate, jus givin some honest feedback...