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Old 10-22-04, 08:22 PM   #22
Detrimental
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Voted For: ..:Logistic:..

Logistic takes this one....his punches were decent and hit hard enough for the win....his verse flowed well....solid structure....nice inners........everything was good except the closer.....those last 3 lines.....never make your verse have an odd number of lines.....it don't sound that goood....it's like a movie that just ends and you're expecting more....elevate more....you've got better....a lot better

RED BEAM......your bverse was really tight too but punches didn't hit as hard as Logistic's....i mean your punches were decent but just not enough to take the win....ya know?good wordplay....like 1 metta and it was good.....close close battle.....kep elevating aight?

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