This was alright here man....Had some nice describing in this, I liked that...liked the way you worded some of the lines and others could have been worded a little better but overall it was alright.....The flow of the pieces was pretty decent, but the line length took away from some of your flow though...I would try to tsay away from rhyming the same words in some of your bars though but other than that right there..the emotion in it was very nice one of the key factors in this piece, which i liked a lot...Overall a nice pieces...keep at it man!