Voted For: ghetto cripple

ok pretty average battle

G.C.

your sounded like a real battle
not text,but Like an outside battle
this was probably the best ALL THREATS
verse I seen on RV so far lol
good flow and ok wordplay
only thing to fix is the structure

Kill

yourrhyme scheme was very basic
the words you ended with should
only be used as fillers
structure was ok

the best thing to do is write a
whol;e bunch of punhlines and pick only the best
that wy your vese will be hott

peace

G.C.=winner

return the favor

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=156999

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