Mesmerize:Excellent. Beautiful vocab and imagery. Very good flow. Best poem I have ever read. Keep up the wonderful work.
Lyric:Very good. Very good imagery. Decent vocab. Decent flow. Just work on the flow and vocab, but nonetheless very good. Keep it up and strive for excellence.
I personally prefered Mesmerize's poem, but Lyric's was a close second. Very nice both of you.

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rap4 ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rp)
n. Slang: A form of popular <a href="http://www.ntsearch.com/search.php?q=music&v=56">music</a> developed especially in African-American urban communities and characterized by spoken or chanted rhyming lyrics with a syncopated, repetitive rhythmic accompaniment.
^Don't forget the white man^
Poetic Scriptures poems:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157364
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157462