Phlogiston
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IP:
Voted For: surgical
Emcee:Surgical
Verse:
From the beginning you see this battle was mine
Cause u basic cable and im on showtime
I steal your life like cars on Grand Theft Auto
Take your breath and make it hard for you to swallow
I'll have your body like the leaves in autum its falling
You talk shit in the restroom but now your stalling
Tired of your rap shit and your little terms
Lysol need to spray your spit cause it filled with germs
An when my punches hit its heavy like a rock hit u
The devil inside of me will make jesus walk with you
You need advice so u go to Staples to find out why your mouth is stuck
They cant seem to understand you u like the Aflac duck
U got to tommorow morning 2 spit shit
Knowin all u gonna to do is copy, paste, and edit
Comments:
well overall i think that you took this...elevate more in all areas besides structure...you just had a better verse than he did.
Marks:
Wordplay - 0/10
Metas - 4/10
Vocabulary - 4/10
Structure - 4/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 5/10
Closer – 4/10
Personals – 5/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 4/10
Overall - 39/100
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Emcee:Reloaded
Verse:
i spit venomus fluid/
bitch you cant step to me so dont do it/
ill unload bullets into your chest if you fuck with me/
then lil nigga it will be time for your surgery/
this fucking battle is high stakes like you and Michael Jacksons sex tapes/
Remember that evey doctor and rapper makes mistakes/
This man mad cause my rhymes are dope/
lil bitch aint even got enough post to vote/
this niggas mother is my number one fan/
bitch should decline this battle while he still can/
Comments:
well i think u lost this one because of your structure and..shit well you just loss thats all i can say...just elevate and go to the tutorial...
Marks:
Wordplay - 0/10
Metas - 3/10
Vocabulary - 2/10
Structure - 2/10
Punches - 3/10
Opener - 2/10
Closer – 2/10
Personals – 3/10
Enjoyment – 1/10
Creativity - 0/10
Overall - 18/100
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V/SURGICAL
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