Completely terrible, no offense.

The first bar, you had the setup second for some reason. The wordplay is simple, and not worded well.

Then the rest of your verese is terrible... some generic evolve line (used ALL THE FUCKING TIME AT RB, trust me), then that useless give himself up line... you can't do personals like that man, you gotta word it better. that closer was blah.

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