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Old 10-26-04, 12:39 AM   #9
La Cosa Nostra
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This shit was good bro.. Some really nicly worded lines in it. Kept on topic, I would of liked to see more multies and internals.
But overall it was good shit. I liked these lines.

Talk to my homie, he's a ball player, low on knowledge..
Low and behold dudes not playin, he's goin to college..

If it wasn't for social problems, what the fuck would i write about?.
without inspiration, good is callused, creativity is not aloud..

^Both pretty fuken good.. Only thing I can tell you to work on, is your flow. Because there was one or two parts that had too many syllables & other small issues where there was no assonance between lines.. But it could have been overlooked.

So good shit there.
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