damn VP, you had pretty good rhyme scheme, but i don't really like the way you put ur structure... jst not use to reading things dat way, but its good to see u doin somethin different... I've never read ur open mics before, but its pretty good so far, but I just kind of got tired of the open mic rite after i started reading it.. jst not the type of open mics i like to read...no offense...jst you know, ppl have their own tastes but overall i give you a 7.8/10 good job

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