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Old 10-27-04, 09:47 PM   #8
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Voted For: Triple_N

first off Automatik:
normally u come harder than you did.. the opener was str8 self-glorification, keep in mind this is a battle.. i was disappointed with;
It's a Known Fact Clowns Like This Will 'Never Be Nice'
I Spit In All Angles Quick ... So I Should Of Been Named A 'Veteran Twice'
My Rhymes Are Too Blazin To ‘Hold It’ Imma Rip Ya Face Till ‘It’s Folded’
^u should stop puttin' apostrophes thru ur verse, it's easy to see ur wordplay and etc... BUT
after the beginning portion, u did have some hard-hittin' punches like the baseball line with the bases loaded, not bad , u had sum aight couple of lines UNTIL the last bar another self-glorification:

It’s nothing … This Battles Over,Either You In Or You 'Out Son' ...
I Spit illness So I'll Probably Be Too Sick To Remember the 'Out Come'
^no good, nice flow, aight structure but quit mentionin' urself throughout keep attackin' him like he stole a million dollars from ya ass.. not bad but i'd say 6/10

next, Triple N:
better metas in urs.. kinda funny too.. u had the better opener and closer- using rotation and duck, duck goose lol... original, u didn't need the quote (") marks either, ur wordplay was also very clear.. ur best lines were the quaterback and the lawn time with- clockin' hose.. ha ha, not bad, ur flow was alright ur structure was mo' stretched than usual but u delivered harder punches and had better vocab.. 7/10

u both did a good job, g'luck with this and hit up my open battle..
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