Ok...
I like the intro...ur imagination On this was steady perfect, I like how u made it like an opening scene and all...perfect for da reader's...

the rest of the poem started calm and everything...than it got alil twisted...i like how u made it short and explained it well with them words, u got good imagination u'kno?...the end was banana's...how the family had cuaght dis duke....nice twisted poem....i never thought of a topic for a poem like this..good shit ma'...pz1