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Old 10-30-04, 09:26 PM   #12
Artemis
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This was feedback posted for Paramik

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yo this was a nice battle. But I really don't like to vote on battles when I'm cool wit both. So I'll jus give feed.

Para, I liked yo verse. I think the big weakness of yo verse was that you used too basic rhyming. Yo mosst non-basic one was "last" and "ass". Like Anx for example used "barely though" wit "scenario". But you 14 and young and got time to up that vocab. haha lol also, try addin' multi's maybe, and inners. but you had some nice lines.I liked that JP line. ill lol I got that shit. Nameplay was aiight, but that shit be soo played now, so it ain't ht ebest no more unless it's more witty, nah layins? but overall nice verse

Anxiety, you had nice rhymin' words. I liked that. But in that LOT line, wtf? yo structure looked fucked there. But the line was good once I figured it out. nice lines, pretty good punches.

Overall, this pretty close battle. could fall either way. Nice verses by both. props. and if you haven;t checked it out yet ,vote on my battle wit EyeDentikal in "frontlines" pc
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