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Old 10-31-04, 03:11 PM   #13
Terse.
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aight,
dizzle, first off--good verse, but the sturcture coulda definitely used some improvement.....i didnt really find anythin outstandin, but u had good vocab...along wit decent personals n punches the whole way thru, so u had good consistency...

Triple, ya verse was straight too...structure was good, but...the fat jokes got REAL old...especially since i've seen A LOT against sdizzle...i mean shit, u had good consistency, but in my eyes, u were jus sayin "you're fat" "you're fat" wit each bar...it was aight wit the first bar or two, but then it got real played...

V/ sdizzle...