this was very nice.. ..flow was on point, i don't use tha word ill very often but shit.. ..tha content was ill

"Climbing the mountain of my poetic existance...
i drag my sword up the cold rocky side...
hands freezing i can hardly move them..
deep piercing pain runs down my spine..."

^^ openin lines were koo, got me a lil interested.. ..then you had me wanted to read more with tha followin 4 lines.. ..

"taking solace within my one true light amidst the darkness..
but as it gradually fades, the lightning hits hard and deep...

Then comes the thunder with a rumble of defiant anger..
As the rain comes pouring down heavy and thick"

^^ good shit.. ..

"Served with bitterness and spice, i saw it coming for an age...
the taste of crushed hearts within a nutshell of poison...
a cold black mist gathers around the broken warrior sage...
crying silently for mercy, he feels and sees nothing but pain..

Suddenly the wind begins to gather pace, the loose rocks taken by the force of the gale...
arise the phoenix from the ashes of darkness, back into the clear skies of light...
Still it may exist haunting within, but now begins the next part of this epic tale..."

^^ my favorite part.. ..ill.. ..

"realisation and enlightement beckons, upon the path i choose to take....
for once more it is time to climb, to ascend to new heights of mortal living...
so there i begin with simplicity in mind - but the lion within cannot be caged - complexity will be found...."

^^ closed tha poem very nice.. ..lookin forward to readin more of ya poems.. ..keep writin


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