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Old 11-01-04, 07:32 PM   #7
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Originally Posted by Mag.Nif.I.Cent
Voted For: ..::iNgEnIuS mInD::..

Kontro man you got a lot better in topicals since you was killah bwoy lol.. this piece was dope and had alot of the characteristics of a good topical verse... the imagery was by far the better of the two verses... the structure and flow were off though it didnt really seem to be worded right in a couple of lines but then again its hard to word everything right in a topical....

I.M ... your verse was also pretty dope... i liked the sequence of events you used sort of like a time line in a bstract way... the imagery was good but didnt touch kontro's although you put alot of effort into your multies i must say that some of them were not needed and sort of clogged your verse at certain points. but you pulled through and let the whole verse flow and that gave you this win.

you got more descriptive and forced your words less and made your verse better and better as time went on.

dope battle


lol, the first 2 paragraphs I took my time to write..n the last 2 paragraphs I keyed in because i had to time to write my verse...pretty good for it being keyed huh!! Now killah, imagine me taking my time to write the last ones lol
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