ola, throwing own on my 2 cents on this. this peice had good storytellin and it was very descriptive with each brar ya wrote. the structure kinda fell off with every stanza being bigger then the 1 before. ya could flip that with the stanza reppin the odds are stacking against ya, but i wasn't feelin that with this. it was agood peice like i said before nice storytellin and imagery and thts what im sayin again. peace.
joey