ok.

first of all make the font size normal. doing this will gte your bar's readable and make it easier on the eye's.

2-I'll eat you up til the very last piece foo
I from the east but im chillin in Phili
i'm the beast from the sixth dimension
....not one hard hitting rhyme in these line's.

3-your topic is played. Self glorification isnt good unless done in a crazy style that no 1 can match. I have seen this level of skill all the time. So boasting bout yourself isnt really your privledge(yet).

4- why do people fight against a power so mighty?
time to go to sleep byotch nighty nighty!!
..........this line isnt good at all. it seem's more like a filler than anything. Plus with it being at the end of your drop it should be one of the strongest rhyme's in it . just so you finish with somthing hard hitting.

5-stand up to the man & man up to the pricks
egging you on/ always talking shit behind your back
you're a bitch you couldnt cop a beat..
............talking behind peoples back is the meaning of bitch. so these line's downgrade your drop.

I am in no way hating at all. I am just stating the fact's. I didnt fel one thing in this drop. maybe because of your topic choice.
try picturing someone's situation and putting yourself in it then writing about it.
for instance some one just found there family member dead.
get more tech with your rhyme's.read one man band's multi tutorial.

pz