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Old 11-06-04, 01:13 PM   #6
LyRi-CaLi
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i was alon on the streets you were by my side,
you eased my pain i gained when my child died,
the corners to the churches,anywhere he fits,
i need jesus to walk with me like Kanye's hit,
devil gots me strapped like the seatbelts in Kanye's whip


I enjoy reading pieces expired by Jesus(God). The line up above was my favorite because it shows we learn from others past, and not to make the same mistake. Great piece showing we all need some type of faith in our lives.

On the down side I just felt that the piece was a bite off "Jesus Walks" by kanye.....the chorus had to much of the same feeling.....maybe that what you were shooting for though.....

I feel if this piece had a different chorus I would of took it more original....
But keep up the work....Good job.....
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