ya prem this was deffinately a nice piece, story line was pure emotion...
some real nice lines,many quotables...(but im not gonna quote them)
much better then the previous drop i read..i enjoyed this..
structure was really good vocab was there...
i liked how you flipped n mixed concepts within a bar changin the emotion
that kept the reader very involved in the drop...overall for the length i was very impressed to see the amount of quality content that i did in this..
vevy nice drop....only place i could say a hint of improvement would be needed
would prolly be in the closer, it was good but personally i like a closer that
leaves the reader in aww....but its not easily accomplished...
non the less this was a very good piece...props....

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!