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Old 11-10-04, 06:34 AM   #8
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Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

took me a couple days to sit down and do this.
didnt prewrite, i had to think of 10 ways to explain useless.

kinda weak opener... good idea but the wording fucked it up...
definitely shoulda been more potent

ya couldnt get ppl to hate ya topic if you were a long commerical.
since ya words target the verb, i guess ya recs the only thing controvercial.

no connection here.... setup never led to the punch... seemed stretched and a little forced also

i spit ya like sunflower seeds, n chew your internal.
ma discharge will hit ya fist hard. like knuckles to urnal.

the set up was hard as hell.... and then ya finished off kinda weak... like knuckles to urnal?... what's an urnal?

your as african american as regis filman is mangerin.
listen duke, my punches will give ya more attention than a manikin.

weak... self explanitory

matched ya mug & ya current expression to form an identical corpse.
get ya perscription quicker than auction, or youll end up with more precautions...
...than genital warts.

woulda been a lot better if the last line wasn't stretched all to hell... this time the set up was weak and the finishing line was the good one

too much inconsistancy in ya verse... you're much better at the poetry stuff than at text battles... just my opinion 6/10


Comin at "K", you couldn't "clean-up shop" if you put "2 K's" at the end and wore a "napkin on ya head"....
My Pencil's missin the ink, That's what she meant by "Fire'in the Lead"...

funny... but the first line was pretty stretched... firing the lead...lol...good shyt...original

Get off the keyboard, Your mouth smells like cum, cause Gurl "you suck"...
Armed attacking on horses, get a horse shoe up the ass, but it aint for good luck....

didn't like the set-up too much but the punch was on point... points lost on a soft set-up

She dropped before me, but reality wise, thats the only time you spittin ahead-a-me...
'cause me losing to an Anerexic, paraplegic, Foreigner, is something you'll ne-va see....

nicest line overall thus far... good set-up ... decent punch.. not the best but definitely the best so far in this battle

It's wednesday. and by tomorrow if your still alive, you need an award...
First crippled Bitch, to survive Kontro's Intellectual, "wards" (words)....

ehhh... not really feeling this bar at all... no real punch and plus ya basically used the same word to rhyme... all ya did was drop the "A"

Mayn fuck it, imma end it wack, Something like VA always does....
Shes facin the fact, Im hot, tried bitin my lines but she forgot her oven gloves

lol...closer was kinda funny... set up was just like ya said it would be but the finishing line kinda made up for it.... 7.9/10


I've seen both of you with better drops than this... shyt... verbal had a better spit than this going against me in the diss the person thread! (that's cuz i was a motivational force as well as her target...lol)but yeah... i gotta give it up to Kon for a better overall verse. punches were set up better and hit harder... do what y'all do, though...one
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