nice piece, dml... but u need to work on the end cuz it fell off a lil' but you not bad as a poetess, keep workin' at it, and take it easy on the vocab cuz u don't need to prove nothin'... poetry is meant to be pleasing to the ear, you don't have to get technical with it, just keep the emotion factor and focus on the topic and you're str8...

pz..

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